I can’t place my finger on it, but it’s lacking something… it doesn’t quite rock the same way. Can someone please explain what’s missing? I feel like it should be a hit, but maybe I’m getting old.
But they did hit all of the points on the smaller sign. Might have been better to try and work them into the next lines but I give credit for the effort.
Yes I noticed that. I think it would fit into the original tune quite well since the meter for that section changes between verses. Syllable count is about right. But it doesn’t rock as hard because the meter doesn’t flow as well.
I can’t place my finger on it, but it’s lacking something… it doesn’t quite rock the same way. Can someone please explain what’s missing? I feel like it should be a hit, but maybe I’m getting old.
The meter is wrong compared to the original
But they did hit all of the points on the smaller sign. Might have been better to try and work them into the next lines but I give credit for the effort.
Yes I noticed that. I think it would fit into the original tune quite well since the meter for that section changes between verses. Syllable count is about right. But it doesn’t rock as hard because the meter doesn’t flow as well.
Welcome to the garden Please respect the rules We got no dogs or ball games And no barbecues